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Re: Critique thread: For finished characters!

Post by arcaneScribbler on Tue Apr 30, 2013 2:03 pm

....is it weird that seeing that picture made me want to make a pair of Phanto Masks (brothers?) that either work at the Lost and Found/Help Center/etc. or inside Trickster's Tower in Spook Citadel...? ...Them being at the Lost and Found would probably be hilarious, actually...
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Re: Critique thread: For finished characters!

Post by turtleOracle on Tue Apr 30, 2013 4:14 pm

I think they wouldn't give back the keys they found...

Lost and Found is the place where you get back the things that you loose in the theme park, right ?

Or maybe I completely misunderstood.
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Re: Critique thread: For finished characters!

Post by Purple Walrus on Tue Apr 30, 2013 4:32 pm

Er, this is more of a fan-story than a fan-character. He's more of a creeypasta character than an ECN one.
Since I can't critique his personality I'll critique his design. I feel like you could do more with it, there are more creepier masks out there than the Phanto one.

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Re: Critique thread: For finished characters!

Post by gloomyMoron on Tue Apr 30, 2013 4:35 pm

That would be the point though? Like, a normal lost and found is a place for lost items to be located in hopes that their owner claims them. In this case, the Phantos would horde any keys they find. They would be both TERRIBLE and AWESOME Lost and Found attendants. Alternatively, they would also make good Security Guards or Janitors (so long as you gave them keys to hold).
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Re: Critique thread: For finished characters!

Post by Purple Walrus on Tue Apr 30, 2013 4:41 pm

Also guys take this Phanto character discussion to the workshop thread. We don't want to start going off topic.
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Re: Critique thread: For finished characters!

Post by awfulAlliteration on Wed May 01, 2013 3:20 pm

awfulAlliteration wrote:I mentioned this guy in the Workshop Thread a while back.

Spoiler:

He's a Shayde businessman named Sham. He's the kind of dude who hangs out in back alleys and sells watches to unsuspecting folks. I'm working on a backstory right now, but I want to know what everyone thinks of him right now?

EDIT: I GUESS I SHOULD ELABORATE ON HIS HUMOR PROFILE HA HA HA Facepalm

35% Insight

+ Confidence
+ Ambition
- Tactless

35% Logos

+ Intelligence
+ Fast-thinking
- Obsessive
- Arrogant

20% Turnabout

+ Quirky
- Kind of sleazy

10% Vision

+ Creativity
- Tunnel vision

Still looking for input on this dude. If you don't mind, I mean.
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Re: Critique thread: For finished characters!

Post by Todd Ingram on Wed May 01, 2013 5:20 pm

I do like his Humor Profile; the spectral thing is a nice touch. I've never really seen Turnabout used for sleaziness, although I see how they could relate very easily. And I like his name as well.

A little more expoisition on him would be nice. Something akin to a profile in the wiki, perhaps.
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Re: Critique thread: For finished characters!

Post by Todd Ingram on Sat Sep 21, 2013 11:26 am

I think a double post is permissible when five months have passed.

Bucky, my first new fan-character in quite a while, has been added to the wiki! He's the first in a series of characters I'm making who live in an abandoned foretress called Bristle Citadel, sent away by the Koopa Troop for being nusiances.
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Re: Critique thread: For finished characters!

Post by turtleOracle on Sat Jan 24, 2015 8:04 pm

Wow. It's been a while, eh ? Well, since PMECN is back, I see no reason to not get back to using this.

So, I recently completely rewrote Beanio's story : Here.

What do you guys think ?
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Re: Critique thread: For finished characters!

Post by ChristianBurger on Sun Feb 01, 2015 1:59 pm

I thought I was alone here! I came on in October and freaked out when no one showed up!

In any event, I think the backstory is fleshed out pretty well. States why the character is in the Mushroom Kingdom, why he isn't ostracized here and how he manages to survive given the personality.
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